By Kinsfire
Reviews
c3markh posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2006 4:29am
Love the chapter. I think all of your styories are great. I dislike the jumping in between stories but I do understand Writers block and your need to work on something different. Really the reason I dislike jumping between stories is for my on selfish reasons. I would like to keep reading the story until the end. Great job in writing and updating as quickly as you do.
Voldemort is Dead posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2006 4:24am
Hmmm... Harry and his wives should have somehow brought the Malfoys to the castle and used THEM for testing out the vest!
I really liked this chapter.
Treck posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2006 3:43am
BRAVO!
The only criticisim (sp) that I can see is wanting a paragraph or three covering the Malfoy's escape from justice.
freakyfinger posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2006 3:39am
OH! We're near the end! Woo-hoo! Er, actually, not really. That means no more of the story to read . . . sigh . . .
Sanj Shankar posted a comment on Tuesday 18th July 2006 4:49pm
wai, what?
No H/hr/p/s/l/g?
Ginny's out for good? That kinda sucks. But the rest is intruiging. Waiting for more.
kapperky posted a comment on Monday 17th July 2006 8:55am
Great story! cant wait for the update, it will more than likely be a great addition!
Rick D Gale posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 5:17pm
If Ginny want's to know the truth about what happened between Harry and Pansy, I have one word for you: 'Pensive'.
Show her what happened - But then that would defeat the whole reason for the story.
I guess you could also use truth serum, but I think a pensive would be better.
Richard Robinson posted a comment on Tuesday 4th July 2006 3:09pm
Cool, I am impressed with your writing style.
Minerva Granger posted a comment on Sunday 2nd July 2006 1:41pm
OH MY GOD. Keep it coming, you are killing me. I love it. Again.
Sue Baldwin posted a comment on Saturday 1st July 2006 3:54am
OK, I missed it somewhere,who else is pregnant besides Luna? No on second thought tell me what chapter it's in. PLEASE
Mariposa posted a comment on Friday 30th June 2006 3:18pm
A Kinsfire update YEA!!!!!!! And a hot one too! I loved the library scene and the "jealous" comment! Hypatia Alexandria is a name only Hermione could think of. Great chapter! Great group loving :oD
Manatheron posted a comment on Friday 30th June 2006 1:22pm
Sex much there harry?
Seriously though, excellent work, You are a true author, and I can't wait for the next chapter, Please keep up the good work!
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 4:29pm
Great chapter and update sooner.
MPF
Sikandar Durrani posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 1:56pm
You know i love all your stories you have written so far. This has been a really great one so far even if you made Gin into a hot-head. Keep going.
till next time
Alex
sasqch posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 1:01pm
This was a very enjoyable chapter. A few things stood out for me.
First was Neville. I really liked how strong a character he has developed into. Unlike HBP, he doesn’t regress back to the timid little spineless first year. He stands up and basically takes his Grandmother to task for being too complacent and stuck in the past. It was truly pleasant to see him do this. And his treatment toward Malfoy was absolute genius.
Another nice small touch was the reiteration of the plan against Voldemort. Rather than just letting the plan remain off-stage until it’s needed, you make an effort to show the crew still working hard at developing a foolproof attack. You augment the idea by having a frank and in-character discussion between Harry and his wives. He would try to keep them safe by keeping them as far away as possible. Just as the women would do everything in their power to help Harry. The uniform front the four display was handled nicely, bringing up Harry’s feelings of potential loss and unworthiness. But you kept it low-keyed as to not fall into a deep angst rut.
Similarly, I also liked the scene dealing with the group’s planning on how to rebuild the Board of Governors. Rather than have no fall-out, you’ve set the stage for the group to constantly keep an eye toward the future. The scene was relatively small, but it worked for me.
My favorite part of this chapter was the scene with Harry and Hermione in the Library. After the earlier taunting on the train, and Hermione’s reminder, I really figured we wouldn’t be getting the scene, at least not in this chapter. I really liked the pacing of the scene, including dialogue, went. I also liked how Harry was being a much more dominant participant, setting the rules and playing to Hermione’s fantasies. The icing on the cake was having them walk out past the other students. Both Harry and Hermione were pretty much showing off to the audience, flaunting their partner as a person they loved as well as rubbing it in the faces of those who doubted or belittled them. I also found the idea of their actions being so moving as to actually trigger the other three into orgasms, rather than simple arousal. That pretty much the reader just how special the act was between the two.
I will say one bit did bother me. And that was Ginny. No, the women treated her with what I considered the right amount of scorn. But Harry was too laid back, almost forgiving. This was the girl that he offered his heart to, only to have her spit in his face. Yes, she was fooled by her brothers. But why would she have blindly accepted their forgery? I, too, come from a large family. And not one of us has ever sided with family over lovers, when a split is attempted. Ginny never once asked for Harry’s side of the story. And she was the one to insult Harry directly, stating that she was glad his parents were dead, rather than see the scum they had spawned. She also was one of the promoters of the "Hate Harry" movement in the school. Her actions led to the rest of the school becoming antagonistic, not only to him, but the four women he fell in love with (Remember, Hermione was attacked early on in the story).
The idea that Harry would hold out some hope for her (as shown by his feelings protected to his wives) is truly odd. And the caveat about her not ever sharing his bed again just screams out that she will be joining him. Harry is holding a severe grudge against all the Weasleys. Yet the ones he should not even come close to forgiving are Ron and Ginny. They were the two closest to him. Their betrayals should be what he thinks of when seeing either one. I truly hope I am wrong in my guess as to Ginny’s future.
Chris
James Barber posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 10:37am
Oh yes one of the best multi harry fiction out their with the all time well actually to be totally honest you would have to share that honor with udderpd on fanfiction.net but you and him are outstanding writers of harry/harem fictions.
simply love this story, I remember when I first read it what month ago or so couldnt get enough and now this update, oh to be young again and to have someone like hermione and a library, whooohoooo yum, yum!
Elfguard48 posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 10:03am
OH Yeah...loved to mouth washing too...had that done to me once when little
Helen...
Elfguard48 posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 10:01am
LOL...Taht's real funny...what the passing witch said to Malfoy..."That had to hurt" then walk away...and the dog...ROTFLMAO...and I'm at work getting funny looks....Looking forward to the next chapter..Will miss this story when you complete in
Helen...
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Thursday 29th June 2006 8:53am
That was very good. Can't wait for more.
gunny
James Barber posted a comment on Friday 21st July 2006 6:23am