Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 10:36am

An interesting chapter. I'm curious to see where it goes from there. Also, I'd think that people with the Marauders skill set, as well as Albus Dumbledore trying to get back into their good graces, would move quickly to nullify Amelia as a threat to them.

mathiasgranger posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 10:23am

Well...Dumbledore's life is in the Potter's hands as far as I am concerned...so him committing suicide would be completely unforgivable and the ultimate indictment of his high-handed actions.

Wow...Voldemort raping Bella...it seems to me that all that would do is reinforce how crazy Voldemort is to Harry. The logic he used to try to send a message to Harry...well it indicates he is mad...of course we already knew that.

Lily and James...I don't have a lot of positive feelings for them presently. Granted they are in essence finally moving beyond their 20's in a manner of speaking...but that excuse doesn't really settle for me.

Waiting to see how you handle any future Harry/Hermione scenes.

Looking forward to the next chappie,
Matt

Alorkin posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 9:55am

Ouch! it looks like Lily knows how to zing with a sting!

"But when I looked at you as a baby, and when I heard that prophecy..." I thought he heard the prophesy before Harry was born.

I really love vindictive house elves! Heh heh heh heh heh!

I must say I'm surprised at Bones' apparent prejudice. I know you didn't write this, but you may have a problem here. In canon, she's portrayed as being firm but fair and absolutely incorruptible. Her actions toward Tonks, are inexcusable.

Looks like dear Rita is forced to write the truth. Although it doesn't actually say, one would assume that the phoenix quill would 'resist' writing untruths.

I agree with Lily's assessment of Dudley. If he had been raised by people with a shred of common decency, rather than the bigoted, narrow-minded parents he was given, he would likely have turned out much better. (see: A Better Man' by: Valandar.)

Looks like Molly's got a vicious side to her!

Snape Dies tonight!

Keith, You're gonna have a hard time surpassing this work. Fortunately, your two styles are similar enough that if it can be done, I have full confidence in your doing it. Da

Alex00 posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 6:29am

Good work so far.

ShadowNixxie posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 3:02am

OMFG. Snape DIDN'T!!! What an evil little bugger!! That is so WRONG!

Mary Morley posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 2:48am

It's nice that you fixed the timing of the Snape/Dobby incident. Your normal style is considerably different from the story so far. Future chapters should be interesting.

Amamama posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 1:30am

Hmm, that was unexpected. Did Snape plan to tell about the Grangers, to get Moldy to hurt Harry through Hermione - or had he planned to tell about Lily and James, and changed his mind mid-step?

And Amelia Bones... Dang it, I've become so used to reading her as a kind and fair woman, and not at all bigoted. Another thing to fight.

James' gift of a phoenix quill to Rita Skeeter was truly inspired, brilliant to play on her vanity like that.

Thanks - all of you!

morriganscrow posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 1:27am

Once again Severus Snape proves what a vindictive, immature, twisted, weak, spineless piece of rubbish he is, attacking Hermione's parents when neither she, nor they, have done diddly-squat to him.
I am agog with anticipation to read the next, new, chapter.

Minerva Granger posted a comment on Saturday 26th May 2007 1:17am

Okay. Insert four-letter-word of choice here. And then, UPDATE

Crys posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 11:47pm

Adversity. Well, the Dursleys qualify. OtOH, growing up in poverty also qualifies. The Potters growing up as neighbors to the Weasleys could have fulfilled the letter of the prophecy.

Hmm. Originally, I'd thought that Dobby had hung Snape (like around the neck until dead). On re-reading, the timing doesn't work, but that was my initial impression.

Bones is a bigot? Huh. This is the first fic I've read where that's the case.

Remus's closing line rather scares me. I think I know where that's going (or at least where Liz was going). I'll see where it goes.

Yeah, that pretty well defines Snape's position, doesn't it?

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 9:33pm

Not sure I believe Harry would have forgiven Dumbledore so quickly - the old man was a complete bastard - but I did like the stuff with Snape especially. Molly yelling she would bathe in the Potters' blood was also great.

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 7:44pm

oh... forgot to mention Amelia. Her reaction seems a bit umbridgeish... but the whole face freezing/eye flashing sounds like the imperious curse... hopefully she will be found out soon.

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 7:35pm

that would have been the perfect night for harry to have a vision/dream of voldie. If harry could see severus willingly and with malicious intent give hermione's parents to voldie in some sort of twisted attempt at vengence... to hurt the boy whom he has hurt so much already... well, I think it would be beautiful. For him to be held accountable for his actions... I would like to see him in azekaban... maybe kissed, or better yet... deaged and forced to grow up again.... or maybe have his magic stripped,... no... i have it. he should be sent through the veil. snape got such pleasure when sirius fell through, perhaps he would like to visit?

Patches posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 6:01pm

Harry is a lot more forgiviing that anyone else.
He is giving Dumbledore a chance in the future to redeem himself with Harry. Lily and James are not as forgiving. I was surprised that Madam Bones was so prejudiced against werewolves. I was also surprised when James let Remus in Harry's room as a werewolf. I guess they trust the wolfsbane potion to do its job. At least Harry was able to tell his parents some of the things that happened to him at the Durseley's. That was hard. It looks like Lily and Dobby taking revenge on Snape has backfired. The Grangers are vulnerable and Voldemort would relish hurting Harry through Hermione. What a terrible thing for Snape to do. I look forward to more of this story. pms

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 4:58pm

Oh, my! I wonder if Severus realizes just what he might unleash by having Hermione's parents killed? I can see matters becoming ugly all around if that happens. A good chapter with some additions to what had been posted before. I can't wait to see where you take this one.

J User posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 4:04pm

This will be long for an ffa.net review, and yet both lighter than and inferior to the reviews by the esteemed David R. Henry which inspired it (thank you, drh); it focuses on only one character. Nonetheless, with the prophecy's wording now confirmed, it's time to play the Moron Game!

Albus Dumbledore, Why Are You A Moron?

You have lied, cheated, threatened, betrayed, and knowingly sent an innocent man to what may very well have been a fate worse than death. (It's very likely that you bear most of the responsibility for his actual death, too, but we don't have definite evidence of that yet.) Your justification for all of this comes down to one line of prophecy: "And forged in the fires of adversity, he will be the One to vanquish the Dark Lord..."

Any halfway competent Divination teacher - not that Hogwarts has one of those, thanks again to you - can tell you that a genuine prophecy will always come true. Never try to stop, deny, change, avoid or redirect a prophecy: it won't work, and it's very likely that in trying, you'll seal your own fate. If you think you've succeeded, you probably just interpreted the prophecy wrongly in the first place.

But bypassing that point for the moment, the line has two parts. So, when does Harry finish being "forged in the fires of adversity"? Was it when he lead his friends to save his godfather after a school year of being vilified, humiliated and tortured? Was it one of the several times he's faced Voldemort at Hogwarts, where more often than not he'd spent much of the school year being looked down on by most of the other students? Was it even earlier, when he first came to Hogwarts, and made the first true friends of his life? Whenever it was, sending Harry back to the Dursleys after their purpose was done was indefensible.

The Jesuits have a saying, attributed to Saint Ignatius: "Give me a child until he is seven, and I will give you the man." It's a very good thing for the magical world that this was not true in the case of Vernon Dursley and Harry Potter, despite your best efforts.

Of course, you can't really be sure the prophecy has been fulfilled until Harry "vanquishes" Voldemort, can you? (I'll be generous and skip the possibility that Voldemort is not in fact the Dark Lord in question.) So, what exactly does that mean? "Vanquish" is a much less permanent term than you might think; it doesn't even mean "kill", much less "defeat forever". If we're being nice to you, we might allow it to mean "defeat decisively", which is still stronger than its plain meaning - but even then, Quidditch teams vanquish their opponents on a regular bases.

So, maybe Harry vanquished Voldemort when he won the brother wands confrontation in the Little Hangleton graveyard. He certainly vanquished the memory of Tom Riddle in the Chamber of Secrets. He almost certainly vanquished Voldemort, who was possessing Professor Quirrel, in his first year at Hogwarts. Heck, he vanquished Voldemort back in 1981 - if having his family's house burn around him counts as "the fires of adversity", then the entire prophecy was resolved way back then, and all your manipulations and cruelty were completely unnecessary. Man, wouldn't that be a downer?

But it's worse than that, and since you allegedly know about prophecies, you should know this already. A genuine prophecy will come true, and that applies to all of it. Your justification - your precious excuse for ruining lives - is not conditional. "And forged in the fires of adversity, he will be the One to vanquish the Dark Lord..." - there are no ifs, buts or maybes about it. The one who the prophecy describes [i]will[/i] be born as the seventh month dies, he [i]will[/i] be forged in the fires of adversity, and he [i]will[/i] be the one to vanquish the Dark Lord. His victory, though it may come at a terrible cost, is already assured; nothing you or Voldemort can do will change that.

Some day, your actions will catch up to you, and you will have to face the full consequences of what you've done; what you see now is merely the start. But in the meantime, just leave.

(And let someone else take over as Headmaster of Hogwarts. You're clearly neither competent nor trustworthy enough to hold the position.)

in-kinsfire posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 3:08pm

Ouch. Snape is really a SOB. Dumbledore isn't much better, and really, are there not better ways to forge than abuse?

I was going to ask why Snape didn't share the news about the Potter parents, but then I guess Voldemort kinda already knew he didn't kill them--though they might have died that night through something that happened after Voldemort died.

Please continue.

EricThorsen posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 2:56pm

Snape will die. It will be interesting to see how, but that idiot just sealed his own fate. Sad really. I like this story, at least what I've read so far. It will be interesting to see if you can keep the same feel the original had when you write your parts for it. Good luck.

Decumo9 posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 2:53pm

Yo, my first time reviewing on this site. Well, i know that the first 8 chapters are not yours, but don't you think that Madam Bones's character is acting oddly. We know from the books that Bones is quite level headed and non-biased.

00_Knight posted a comment on Friday 25th May 2007 2:43pm

Amelia Bones as a bigot! Thats outrageous, I just can't see it... even in fanfiction! Devious Dumbledore, Evil Ron, Nice Draco, and a Caring Snape I can live with but to portray Ameila Bones as a racist... unbelievable! I know this story wasn't originally yours Kinsfire, but... it just doesn't fit! ( looks out window and pigs are flying... Watches the weather information for Hell and sees -30 degrees farenhight!) Anyway, I'm looking forward to your spin on this story, so until the next update!