By Kinsfire
Reviews
TheHard posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 6:09am
Uff, nice story, are you going to continue it? i'm looking for the next, because is really not the typical HP/Azkaban story, just because is friends did not turn the back to him...
Nice one :)
slayersfan01 posted a comment on Thursday 9th November 2006 4:10am
This fic really, really, REALLY has my attention! It's just so, I don't know, I don't have a word for how cool it is. Please, can you please update soon. I would really like to see what happens next!
noylj posted a comment on Monday 6th November 2006 5:16pm
Well, that's nice. Where did Shack find Harry if it wasn't Azkaban? What would make Shack believe Harry just from the conversation with Scumjoy? I feel lost in how Shack is so out of it.
noylj posted a comment on Monday 6th November 2006 4:48pm
Well, I like this story so far, but only 4 chapters? You have to find time to work on all your great works...or something like that.
Illusia posted a comment on Friday 22nd September 2006 6:12am
I liked this :) I hope more is coming soon. Somehow it still feels like they're yanking Harry.
tridentwatch posted a comment on Friday 15th September 2006 1:00pm
not good too bland too oc. srry.
Jimbocous posted a comment on Tuesday 5th September 2006 12:03pm
Nice so far.
jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Friday 1st September 2006 6:09pm
Very cool, I like it and I can't wait to see what happens next, I love the fact that your targeting Scumgouger.
nancy in chicago posted a comment on Wednesday 30th August 2006 3:00pm
I'm enjoying this. Scrimgourer is going to get his, isn't he <G>.
Please update soon!
And, I found it on the Sorting Hat Nominations... it's been a boon for me to find decent fics that aren't on sites that I knew before.
CaptainG posted a comment on Tuesday 15th August 2006 6:39am
Yay! finally an update! its good to see. Lol finally we begin to understand whats going on - somehow i doubt that's it though.
I understand you wantr to update your other stories as opposed to this one, but an update would be much appreciated soon
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Tuesday 15th August 2006 5:03am
Interestig start.
gunny
mayfair posted a comment on Tuesday 15th August 2006 2:21am
Well, this is my first review for any of the stories on this site, and usually I am appreciative of your writing style and look forward to updates on your various fics. However, your one-faced portrayal of Harry has me exasperated at times especially when its unrequited. You have a tendency to potray a hyper-ansty my-rants-are-one-mile-long-every-line Harry and while it fits in with some of your ics, they become irritating in others like this one. The only fic where Harry behaves more rationally if "Forever yours and yours". My only wish is that I see Harry is more normal fashion on others stories on this website, especially those corresponding to post-HBP era. I apologise for any offence that my comments may have caused.
Anaknisatanas posted a comment on Saturday 5th August 2006 9:46am
Wow, really good story. I'm hoping that you intend to continue to have regular updates for it. I really like this Harry, he's so full of anger but willing to research things before he makes any rash moves.
Patches posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 7:59pm
Avery good story but very dark. I look forward to more of this story. thanks for writing. pms
sasqch posted a comment on Friday 4th August 2006 1:53pm
It’s nice to see an update for this story. I enjoyed Shacklebolt’s attitude toward both Harry and Scrimgeour. He knows Harry, and so he knows that Harry’s irrational anger makes no sense. But I also really liked how both Shacklebolt and Hammer refuse to be rebuffed by Harry’s attitude. But better still is their very obvious distaste toward Scrimgeour. And having Shacklebolt leave an Extendable Ear, and telling Harry in such oblique terms shows his intelligence. His fervor in wanting to be there when Scrimgeour is confronted was very well portrayed.
Harry’s leaving England makes sense; his continual abuse by those in power would dictate a rational person to retreat and recoup at the bare minimum. But Harry’s innate sense of responsibility (guilt?) prevents him from turning his back on the innocent (and very gullible) populace.
However, I found a few items of the story to be odd.
First is the addition of the Horcruxes. Yes, I realize that this simple addition makes the story HBP-compliant. But my problem with this is the same thing that is bugging me by the potential Book 7: how in the world was Hermione (and the others, I’m guessing) able to destroy four Horcruxes in one year. I mean, Dumbledore suspected the existence of the Horcruxes for years, getting confirmation during CoS. Yet he was only ever able to discover and eliminate one Horcrux in all that time. And given the And given the level of protections around the fake locket, I cannot see that the remaining Horcruxes aren’t protected with highly lethal traps. But according to Shacklebolt, all the Horcruxes were found and eliminated in the one year that Harry was imprisoned. But this isn’t really a fault of yours, but rather of Rowling’s.
The second thing that bugged me was Harry’s simple acceptance of Scrimgeour’s tale of being found guilty. Harry had spent the summer prior to his fifth year scouring newscasts for stories that hinted at Voldemort and his minions. I cannot fathom how he would have missed out on the idea of the judicial system taking months at the minimum and more likely years to decide a case. Hell, the police refused to accept his less than heartfelt confession, so he knew that the case would have had to have been investigated more. He also knows of Scrimgeour’s penchant for simply locking people away without cause or trial (see Stan for an example). Added to that, why would Harry assume that Fudge’s cronies (who unexplainably remained in power in canon) would not have wanted to savor his incarceration? At the very least, Umbridge would have lobbied for a chance to publicly humiliate Harry. And don’t forget Harry’s discovery of his wand and other possessions at Privet Drive. If he had truly been found guilty, he knows the Ministry would have scrounged up his personal effects. If Scrimgeour was continually tormenting him, wouldn’t snapping Harry’s wand have been an additional piece of torment? Or even just taunting him with the wand would have been equally injurious.
The third problem I have with this chapter is Harry’s attitude and treatment toward his friends, specifically Hermione. Yes, Harry was under the impression that he was found guilty and was abandoned to Azkaban by his friends. And even though the Dementors were not there to psychologically torture him, the dirty Aurors and guards did physically abuse him. But he appears to have accepted Shacklebolt’s statement of nobody knowing of Harry’s fate. Harry was originally dismissive of their tale, but based on Harry’s simple statement acknowledging the fact that Shacklebolt was telling the truth after the conversation with Scrimgeour, Harry now knows the truth. And that truth includes the fact that none of his friends knew where he was (yet they continued with his task of hunting the Horcruxes). More importantly, it was Hermione who figured out what happened.
So why is he remaining so antagonistic toward her in the letter. I realize that this story is designated as "non-ship", but that isn’t a point here. He now knows that he truly owes his current freedom to Hermione (and the others), yet he is overly formal and reserved in his correspondence as well as his overall demeanor. And he doesn’t trust his friends enough to the point that he is planning on following them around prior to the scheduled meeting. Sorry, but I am having too much trouble reconciling his attitude given his knowledge of the facts. And as for being in Azkaban making him paranoid, that really doesn’t wash for me. No Dementors means no mental assaults; so he shouldn’t be disoriented and confused (much like Sirius was during his first days of freedom). And I can’t see him suspecting Hermione (or the other invitees) of being spies for Scrimgeour.
I am looking forward to the rest of this story; I’m just having some trouble with a major point of characterization
Chris
The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 3rd August 2006 10:58pm
A truely interesting story. I have read others with this basic format - Harry unjustly thrown into Azkaban, angry Harry released one way or another - but I am really intrigued by your handling of it and am eagerly awaiting future chapters. I know it seems to be a standard request, but I do hope you are able to update quickly and often. Keep up the good work.
bjon66 posted a comment on Thursday 3rd August 2006 10:13am
This is a pretty cool story.. I think his attitude towards everybody is realistic.. I hope you don't make him all buddy, buddy with his ex friends.. I like him better this way...lol..
Sonicdale posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd August 2006 2:40pm
Okay.
First Person Harry is hard to write. I tried it, only got one short story. I've read others, found most of them wanting.
Even a couple of Azkaban Harry stories.
This one kicks em all in the stones. I like the attitude, the Shacklebolt interaction, the Hermione letters, everything.
I've never begged for a story to continue, bu this one needs a next chapter. And if you don't have Harry asking Hermione WHY she stored her wand in her bra, then I'm gonna write a nasty computer virus that will seek out and infect all copies of Kinsfire fics on the entire internet and replace the main characters with Elmo and Oscar the Grouch. :)
Good, damn fine work, man. Keep it up.
Chthonius posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd August 2006 12:53pm
I had avoided reading this before because of when it had been last updated, but today when I saw the chapter alert in my inbox I just clicked on chapter one and started reading, not remembering why I hadn't before. That said, please please please keep updating this. I know you're juggling several stories, but I was hooked on this one as soon as I started it, and I'm really hoping I won't have to wait forever to read more of it.
This is why I should only read completed fic's. I'm tempermentally not good with the waiting. :P
Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Saturday 17th February 2007 8:18am