snidget41 posted a comment on Friday 15th December 2006 10:22am

I liked it!! Not too super-harryish (is that a word?) I agree about the ending -- I couldn't figure out how the PM came onto the scene, and would have liked to see a more lengthy transition to the final ending.

Keep up the good work!
Snidget41/Bob

Jeffrey1 posted a comment on Friday 8th December 2006 2:56pm

you are correct.decent sequel,weak ending.i liked it as a whole,but it was lacking something.heart?soul?purpose?maybe/maybe not.
as a whole,i do like your stories.which of course means i'm trying hard to be respectful (and PATIENT ).
good luck and god bless,

Jeffrey

Minerva Granger posted a comment on Wednesday 29th November 2006 12:45pm

Congratulations, Keith. I really, really enjoyed this. I just wish it had gone on longer, althought i am glad it will be picked up and worked on again later. Good luck with NaNoWriMo. I know I failed it, but maybe next year. Anyhow, i'm looking forward to seeing what happens next, when you get the chance to pick up this story again.

MaryJane6707 posted a comment on Monday 20th November 2006 3:38pm

I am still trilled myself that Harry was able to help oust all the baddies and start over. I also like all of the new girls. I'd say they are all going to be busy!

Dr.Shadow posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 7:34pm

Pretty anti-climatic so far

Dr.Shadow posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 7:34pm

Pretty anti-climatic

naosei posted a comment on Saturday 18th November 2006 5:54am

Even as a first draft a nice story. :D

Tumshie posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 6:53am

Excellent writing once again, I love the way your mind works and appreciate the time and effort you put into your work. Thank you once again.

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 5:10am

Well... it doesn't always end with a bang. Besides, Harry is nice enough a guy that he would want to avoid a category-A bloodbath in the style of 'Lord of the Rings'.

Besides, as Sun-Tsu wisely pointed out, the best victory comes at the least price in blood. He was able to manoeuvre Scrimgeour to basically take himself out without too much of a fight, which was nearly an ideal outcome. Still, I await the expanded version of the rebellion with bated breath.

Harry got his own punishment: He is the MofM! So much for an 'easy' life. ;-)

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

Alorkin posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 4:05am

I want desert! The story was flowing smoothly, but then you allasudden finished it.
It was a really great tale, but there seems to be something missing.
Harry's defending the family against Scrimgeour's troops has made him a hero.(again!)
Minister Scrimboy appears to be following Fudgie's footsteps, ruling the wizarding world as some kind of personal feifdom.
If my parent's graves, or my wife's had been desectrated in such a manner, I believe I would have reacted in exactly the same manner.
The ministry mouthpiece is as always, doing just exactly what it is told, and the bug, desperately needs to be squashed!
Snape's arrest is nothing more than petty revenge. The Quibbler has probably seen a massive increase in subscriptions.
The arson attack on the Quibbler is also revenge, (though so is the firing of the mouthpiece).
Final scene was well writ, from the moment they were captured, to the pronouncement of the queen.
All in all, an excellent short. Alorkin

The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 10:19pm

I will willingly wait for the rewrite to read a sequel. A wonderful story and I enjoyed it immensely. Keep up the great work. I'm looking forward to anything you post.

The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 9:50pm

Oops. I don't think the Aurors are going to want to continue their action and, if they do continue it, I don't pity them at all for their brains are missing. Keep up the great work.

The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 9:24pm

For want of a nail... Well, the death of a child... in such a way... the repercussions will be far reaching. Umbitch's order being reinstated is going to do more toward furthering Harry's aims than just about anything. It's a shame it took such a large 'nail'.

Keep up the great work. (If you don't recognize the reference, ask me.)

Manatheron posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 5:52pm

I won't lie, the end is a little weak, You might want to expand on harry's capibilities, and perhaps throw in a battle with rufus and Harry just to get ol scumgroper to confess, cause everyone knows the bad guy's have to gloat about their schemes. :)

'IN a fight give me a bad man over a good man anyday. A bad man will gloat, he will try to prolong your agony before finly finishing you, a good man will kill you with hardly a word'

~Author Unknown~

Renzo7 posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 3:39pm

Excellent work, sad to see it ends, but I can't wait to see your next masterpiece. keep it up!

Davideg posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 12:40pm

thank you for this fantastic sequal to Like A Phoenix From The Ashes it realy was a fantastic read thank you

jdcox61 posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 12:34pm

Aww man, I like this story, but I was kinda hoping kingsley would shoot scrimegour in the ass. Kinsley always kinda looks like Samuel Jackson in my mind whenever I visualize him. I just wanted to think about rufus yelling "You bastard, you shot me in the ass!" Mmmmm........Good Times. Great Story, I liked it alot

Deborahsu posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 10:02am

That's it? It's over already? This is an outline and a beginning, right? Good job!

matthiasblack posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 8:09am

Excellent, I am happy that you wrote this follow up and look forward to your writing in the future.

imakeeper posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 8:02am

wow... thats insane... i love how the lovegoods are depicted as being very sane! i cant want for more drama and harry better succeed