mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 10:35am

Holy moly, this is getting scary. Umbridge is screwing with the wrong family. What a screwed up thing to do. I have got to see what Harry does in response to this.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 7:52am

Uh oh. This is getting messy. At least Malfoy was as easy to deal with as he should be.

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 7:09am

It's got to be Draco, right? He's the only one who we didn't see die of the major evil ones. Bastard sends a finger. I can't wait to see what's in store.

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Wednesday 12th December 2007 5:43am

Why didn't they visit Harry in jail?

Robin Hood posted a comment on Sunday 25th November 2007 3:20pm

Isabella Honeyspear is such a Bond girl name, it's no shocker you had to make her a 'puff so we are sure she isn't going to try to kill him one chapter later.

BloodRedJawz posted a comment on Friday 7th September 2007 1:26pm

Awwww, and I was looking forward to Honeyspear and Ginny joining the harem XD

Jdnokc posted a comment on Friday 17th August 2007 1:10am

liked both stories but a couple things i noticed in this sequal. 1 in an earlier chapter you had already said that both Hermoine and Pansys parents had already been moved from their homes but then a couple chapters later said they needed to moved???? also earlier in the story you said that "the entire manor groundswas to be placed under the fidelius so the aurors would not have been able to find it attack it. just curious about that.

Neil Glover posted a comment on Tuesday 12th June 2007 9:12pm

Great story, i hope you'll do a sequel

Infin1x posted a comment on Tuesday 15th May 2007 11:15am

It is a weak ending and I would be excited to see either this expanded or a small sequel but it still turned out well.

Cynthia1850 posted a comment on Saturday 5th May 2007 5:21am

Yeah for the good guys!!! Excellent story by the way.

gadriam posted a comment on Monday 30th April 2007 7:55pm

Hmm. Yes, it's a good synopsis but it could do with a rewrite, to give the people more...reality. This story felt a lot like a sketch in primary colours instead of a completed fic.
The newspaper articles were good, but not great. You make it quite clear that the Revolutionaries have the masses' support, but nothing is done with it. The crowds of the poor never really gets the faces you seem to go for, and the pureblood league does an incredible amount of nothing. There were also a bunch of subplots, like Ginny and Gabrielle, that didn't really go anywhere.
I still enjoyed it, though. I really like your lighter style (coming straight from Bobmin's Sunrise), and the smutty bits are powered by love rather than hormones. No offense, but you're like Eddings to Bobmin's Donaldson. Your writing is simple, leaving much to my imagination and i like that. It makes things vivid, and i can view the story as dark as i want it because you leave it to me to choose what to focus on, Angst or Boobs, and while i haven't seen you do the Eddings, by making the basics up as you go along, you do leave enough threads hanging to fill a book on it's own.

DISCLAIMER! This review was written by a guy who couldn't write a story to save his life!

Looking forward to Magic: Revolutions Mk2

g

patrik svensson posted a comment on Sunday 15th April 2007 5:56am

My thought about the fic as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.

darthme1011 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 8:58pm

is there another Firebird Suite? part 3

writerpayne posted a comment on Friday 9th March 2007 11:36am

i really hope that you do update this story or add a sequal because i loved it. Thanks for Writting a brilliant story.

Laura aka Lady_payne

vertru posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 9:14am

I thought the ending was eminently logical, thought it could probably use a bit of fleshing out. A couple of more chapters, maybe, showing how they change things and how the "Purebloods" fight the changes would be interesting. And that is not to mention that dangling rope you left concerning certain young women who'd like to be wives #5 and #6. Good job, my friend, especially considering you wrote this in just over two weeks. Moving on now to project #2 now.

Vern

mekareami posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd January 2007 12:31pm

I really enjoyed this story but felt the ending was rather abrupt. I hope you someday continue this story :) Thank you for writing.

Ian Major posted a comment on Monday 1st January 2007 10:10am

Dang that was a cool story, thank you for writing it.

kainboa posted a comment on Monday 25th December 2006 7:56am

great story, i would really love to see a third story in this series that shows how harry deals with leading the goverment

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Tuesday 19th December 2006 4:25pm

But! But...
Please, pretty please don't leave us hanging like this.
It is such a brilliant story (yes I am using flattery, I am desperate)
PLease write just a teeny, tiny epilogue or something.
Thank you, thank you, thank you

TheHard posted a comment on Saturday 16th December 2006 2:09pm

Nice story... great strongs points in the story, and you're right, we all know that you can do better in rewritting the end of the story :)

Thanks for sharing