Mionefan posted a comment on Tuesday 29th January 2008 4:05am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Well, I must say, you hit it spot on with Lily. You seem to have got all the points right... redhead, sister, hints of temper in canon, mother that can't let go of her only son. James said it best... "No, I can see that you wouldn't want him marrying a woman so much like his own mother."

Bedrup posted a comment on Thursday 24th January 2008 7:45am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Nah

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Monday 14th January 2008 7:57am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

What is it about Potions Professors? Lily Potter was channelling a certain Greasy Git much to closely for comfort (enough to get sledged by both Harry and James by turns; and in Harry's case twice, and it's almost *certain* that Minerva is going to get in a few swings of the mithril hammer as well), and the weird thing is that it was an apology from Hermione that brought this on (actually, *two* apologies from Hermione, one in private and one in public). However, it was James' strike that likely hurt more than Harry's (the similarity between Lily and Hermione) though Harry's wasn't far off the mark (the similarity between Lily and the late Petunia Evans-Dursley).

a_wanderer posted a comment on Wednesday 9th January 2008 1:58am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Are you intending that Lilly should be this unlikeable? The story as it stands raises interesting questions about the Evans home, the relationship between James and Lilly and Lilly's mental health.

Lilly striking Harry, threatening Snape (even through James) and her attempts to manipulate those around her give evidence of a dysfunctional family.

A very interesting story line. Some of the interactions between characters, especially Harry and Lilly, seem jarring. It is as if parts of the puzzle (characterization) have been forced together rather than fitting neatly. However the lines of conflict are clearly defined.

Kinsfire replied:

Actually, there is a very specific reason for Lily's attitudes right now. It's not terribly obvious, but the readers have definitely seen their origin.

It will be explained at some point - it's too big a plot point to avoid.

Banner posted a comment on Tuesday 8th January 2008 2:13pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Thank you for showing Lily as someone who is less than perfect - although she's rapidly descending into someone *truly unpleasant.* I'm delighted that you updated. Thak you.

Mirai no Sei Anashi posted a comment on Tuesday 8th January 2008 12:58pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Not bad at all. As a fellow fanfic writer, I'm always reading other work and comparing it to my own, to see where I do well and where I do not do well in both writing and ideals when compared to other people. So far, this story has been written superbly, even if the updates are a tad bit few and far between as of late. I do hope that you will continue.

Immortalitis posted a comment on Monday 7th January 2008 8:13pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Most intriguing!

A very good portrayal of Lily and James.

Please, do continue this lovely fic.

Regards
Immo

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd January 2008 5:31pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Excellent chapter, as always. I must say I am surprised at Lily being so much of a harridan, but at the same time, it's interesting that she's not as much of a saint as everyone else always makes her out to be...

rune1806 posted a comment on Sunday 30th December 2007 4:53am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

making the potters real people who have some bad in them, well done i look forward to more.

Clell65619 posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 5:46pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Excellent. Lilly Potter as a cast iron bitch is a (i believe) a unique take on the character (at least when not in a 'the potters lived and think their other kid is TBWL and abuse Harry story) looking forward to the next chapter.

jono74656 posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 10:51am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Ouch!
What a way to drive a knife into the side of the light. Their leader's a manipulative charlatan, and the great light hope has parent problems.
Lily needs a serious time out, before she loses her son.... again.

A brilliant characterisation, I always wondered how one family could have produced the saint-like Lily and the un-saint-like Petunia, but it appears that the resemblence was there all along, but everyone seems to have had rose-tinted specs on.

On a seperate note, are you having issues with formatting or some such, since there's an unusual number of random symbols throughout the text.

Eagerly awaiting the next update,

J

dexterz posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 4:33am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

very nice chapter ..is there a problem with the text formatting used here?lots of euro symbols and TM symbols....

a_mere_muggle posted a comment on Thursday 27th December 2007 2:15pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Thanks for the update! Im excited to read the rest.

MonCappy posted a comment on Thursday 27th December 2007 7:09am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Lily seriously screwed up. I think it is safe to say that Harry no longer thinks of her as mum.

Darke Gray posted a comment on Thursday 27th December 2007 4:09am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Wow, great chapter. I loved it. You made Lily Potter into a real life person pretty much. Before this everyone always said she was the sweet little girl, now we see her relation to Petunia. I hope either James or McGonagall can get through to Lily before she loses her son for a second time. I also would never of thought that Hermione and Lily would not like each other, with them being so much alike, but then again they both are headstrong and stubborn, so I can see them going at it pretty violently. Anyways, I hope your next chapter is up sooner than it took you to put this one up, I really enjoy this story and can't wait to read more.

Darkness posted a comment on Thursday 27th December 2007 1:05am for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Harry suddenly reverting to 'Professor' from 'mum' was rather OOC. Actually Lily was rather OOC and two-dimentional in this chapter, since this side of hers seems to have come from way left-field. You could have gone another route if you wanted to get a Hermione/Lily confrontation, because this just reads horribly.

morriganscrow posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 11:45pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

What an interesting view of Lily you present. She is clearly in need of some parenting classes.
Keep up the great work!

participium posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 11:23pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Hmmm, nice chapter. I like the confrontation.
But why do you refer to James as a bully? The relationship between James and Snape clearly isn't that of a bully. Remember that in the memory, the minute James' turned his back, Snape attacked him with a cutting curse. If snape was a victim of a bully, he would not fight back. No, their relationship is not that of bully and victim but of two rivals who hate eachother.

Oldwolf posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 6:19pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

If that really is Lily Potter, someone needs to check for mind control magic. She gets a bit of latitude for just getting her son back, but this is beyond the pale. I'd suggest a Legemency probe and an hour in a full body bind for starters. Maybe she will take the opportunity to think things through for once. She's putting any and all future relationships with her son in mortal peril with this act, and I thought it was James who was supposed to strike out randomly when forced to think.

Alex00 posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 6:12pm for Trouble Brews at Hogwarts

Great work.