mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 4th January 2008 11:26am for Chapter 4

I gotta say... the first person stuff is kind of awkward, with the interjections of him talking to other people about things they said that don't show up. I felt that way about the other four as well. It just has a very unnatural flow. It didn't feel organic to me. Maybe I'm nuts and the only one who thinks so, but there you have it. Otherwise, I like the story, I think it's really well done. You have very creative torture ideas... not sure I really want to know why. I'm kidding, but really, it's very good.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 3:12pm for Chapter 4

Hmm. Some of that was . . . disturbing.

Believable, though. Well done.

Oh, and the sexy librarian strikes again. Was this written before Family Matters, perchance? Definitely written pre-HBP . . .