vertru posted a comment on Friday 2nd February 2007 1:38pm

Interesting take on what Severus is really doing in the war. His being totally honest at that point with Mouldie would do the trick, and be very logical. I enjoyed Hermione's reactions to the thoughts of various things. Well done.

VErn

mrrlyn posted a comment on Wednesday 10th January 2007 11:29pm

I like this story and cant wait for more to it

writer'sblock posted a comment on Wednesday 27th December 2006 6:57am

Other ways of saying stupid: brainless, dense, half-witted, imbecilic, inane, asinine, driveling, doltish, puerile, and jejune.
And, by the way, an interesting start to what seems to be an interesting story.

mekareami posted a comment on Thursday 21st December 2006 6:32am

Good start and I hope you continue it someday. I love fics where Harry tells Dumbledore to piss off.

Thank you for writing

Jason Karr posted a comment on Friday 15th December 2006 8:36am

have you got any ideas of how you are going to protect hermione's folks, as well as the otheir girls.

Bob Swagger posted a comment on Saturday 28th October 2006 8:12pm

Shame that this doesn't have more to it. Was really intrested to see where the Gabby side plot was headed. Seemed like it would go the "Hope" route with a twist. Hope you finish it someday soon.

Mouse posted a comment on Tuesday 24th October 2006 8:33am

This is a excellent chapter update.

Banner posted a comment on Tuesday 10th October 2006 4:57am

Snape is tough, smart, and brave. Too bad he's a jerk.
One can't help wondering how he would have turned out if he'd been in Ravenclaw, or if the Marauders had been thoroughly spanked the first time they abused him.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Monday 9th October 2006 12:54am

Great story. Please start updates soon. I really would love to see where this story goes.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Sunday 8th October 2006 5:12pm

Outstanding. This is getting sooo good.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Sunday 8th October 2006 4:39pm

Outstanding, I think I will really like this story.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Sunday 8th October 2006 3:54pm

Good start.

gunny

koppe posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 8:32pm

Promising indeed. I hope inspiration hits you and that you'll update soon. Hope you continue the story past the start of next Hogwarts-year, as I'm looking forward to (almost dragging my tounge :-) a Harry&Hermione/Gabrielle and possibly Harry&Hermione/Gabrielle/Ginny story.
Keep up the great work.

koppe posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 8:17pm

Great so far...
Do I detect a hint of Hermione/Gabrielle and perhaps Hermione/Ginny in the future? And is it possible that Gabrielle has somehow bonded to Harry? I also hope Ginny has saved herself for Harry.

Potter Thinker posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 10:44am

Keep it coming! Keep it coming!
"Hey Mikey! He likes it! He likes it!"

james mitchell posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 2:57am

very very good start keep em cummin i hanging out for another chapter
please make it as fast as posible
i dont think i can wait to long to finish readin the whole story
and thankyou is in order as well

Sterling posted a comment on Friday 29th September 2006 9:28pm

Hi there. First of I want to say I do enjoy reading your stories. Most of them are quite far-fetched but that doesn't stop them from being fun. I do, however, want to point out that you seem to recycle plot points and dialogue elements in most of your stories. The "thanks for the compliment" line concerning Harry having an erection. Harry being emancipated. Harry impressing the goblins...These are just a few examples. You may want to think about how to shake things up a bit in your writing. These thematic similairities make your stories pretty predictable and homogenous, suprising the readers now and then can be a good thing.

Well, that is my two cents worth. I truly hope you don't take my comments as an insult. Your writing is fun to read. I just wanted to offer some constructive criticisms

Kinsfire replied:

I don't consider this one a flame, as opposed to someone who said similar things a few days ago. Tone is a big part of the thing. The other guy's review was written to be insulting.

As for thematic similarities - well, guilty as charged. I like to play around with the world a bit, but certain things sneak back in, whether I realise it or not at the time. Usually when I have the goblins react to him, it's because I need them later in the story. If I don't need the goblins, they don't come into it.

And to some extent, it's a learning experience. What works; what doesn't; what I overuse; what needs more use.

But can't that be said for all of us who write? *grin*

Thanks for your thoughts. I do appreciate them.

Vandroza posted a comment on Wednesday 27th September 2006 11:42pm

While sudden, I'm enjoying the change in Harry and Hermione's relationship. I'm looking forward to seeing what else happens between them and with Dumbledore!

djo posted a comment on Wednesday 27th September 2006 7:34pm

I love it - everybody starts to work against everybody and new alliances are forming. Best is Fudge working on his own demise without even knowing...
Keep going!

whyshouldicare posted a comment on Wednesday 27th September 2006 4:26pm

LOVED IT!