The Resident posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 9:13am

Damn, getting to the good stuff and Fleur shows up. Or is it Gabrielle? In either case things could raise Harry's blush factor by a bunch. In case you haven't figured it out yet, I've really enjoyed what you've written so far (even if you did use the old chestnut of Harry's cluelessness around women.) ;-) I'm looking forward to the rest of this SOON! (Unsubltle hit to write more of this in a hurry - but up to your usual standards of excellence, of course. Take care of yourself and Dorothy. Thank you again for all the reading enjoyment the both of you have furnished to all of us who read your stories.

dadofdj posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 7:04am

Just like with your other stories, excellent. Hope you update this and some of your other stories soon please. I love all your work.

Bringhimup posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 5:21am

For me this is the most interesting story, since I read Family Matters, which is by far your best one (and the only one that I can reread every month).

I only dislike the —- between:

She quickly undid his trousers, and soon was fulfilling her fantasy.
—-
As they exited the train in Brussels, she chuckled deep within her throat.

As a NC17 story, the first chapter would be longer and for me this is almost always better ;)

I hope you will find it someday in your heart to continue with this one, because it is the one with the most potential for a realistic outcome in your stock of stories.

(Don't get me wrong ... I don't dislike "Harem Stories", as long as Hermione is together with Harry as the only male, but more than one girl for the chosen one is highly unlikely.)

Davideg posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 3:56am

wow that was great but you toldly skiped the sex seen why

Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 2:08am

OK, I admit to never being on the Chunnel train, but from the trains I have been on, I can't imagine it either private or comfortable for making love. Not even the sleeping cars are very comfortable. But, whatever.

The visit to the bank, the stores, were well done. I like the fluffiness (I'm a sucker for fluffy).

Question, though. When Harry oritinally wrote Hermione, I got the impression he was going to do something more than just run away - maybe train or learn. Now they just seem to be runing away. Did he forget, or did I misunderstand.

Thanks for the story. Looking forward to more.

Tom A.

Exarikun posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 1:37am

coolness. you write such good stories. but you write too much of them at one time. i'm still waiting for you to finish 'ties of blood' so you can go back and finish 'phoenix from the ashes'... ah well, guess i'll have to wait a bit longer... please hurry with updating the rest of your fics.

Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 1:20am

Nice start. I like independent Harry stories. Looking forward to this.

Thanks for creating it.

Tom A.

PhiloWorm posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:36am

awww that was sweet, well thought out and perfectly logical. I'll be looking forward to reading the rest of this fic.

sasqch posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:21am

This is an enjoyable set-up. The running away scenario is one that I’ve seen before. But it was always the loner-Harry. And I’m not a fan of that. I don’t read Harry Potter fan fiction just because of one character. I’m more interested in the interactions among the set of established, non-original characters.

Therefore, this one caught my eye with the concept of Hermione not letting Harry go on his own. I like that Harry tried to leave everybody behind. He, like any teen but more so given his experiences, wants to experience freedom. So, with the extra restrictions placed on him, it only makes sense that he would want to escape to someplace, anyplace, else. And with his sense of honor, and self-doom, he wouldn’t want to endanger anybody else. Nor would he think that he is worthy of anybody sacrificing their time for him. I also liked how he tried to be overly chivalrous and sleep in the tub when Hermione barged in on his room. It showed that he finds her attractive, but again, that he could not be worthy of her attentions. Just as his attempt to ditch her while she showered was in character; to possibly protect her for either the dangers of accompanying him, or simply from his own "perverted" advances.

I really liked the strong Hermione in this story. She isn’t going to sit back and let Harry get away with either running away from people, or himself. I like that she is being forward in trying to open Harry’s eyes to the fact that she is more than willing to be with him. But I also liked how she was panicked when Harry had successfully ditched her. She isn’t quite as confident as she may try to appear.

We’ve been given only one chapter really, yet the potential for the story is very high for me. You’ve set-up a very strong-willed and determined Hermione to help Harry face whatever inner-demons he will try and control over the summer. You’ve given them the money and mobility for freedom. The tent (I like how Hermione put her foot down and demanded a single bedroom) allows them the comfort they could need, and yet continues their absolute freedom.

I also liked that rather than dillydallying, you had Hermione broach the subject of sex very early on. And Harry’s response was true to character. He was leery at first just because Hermione was being so strange. And her response to that was nicely done as well. The one possible complaint I had was their choice of location for their first time. Yeah, I’ve seen the movie in question. And yes, the scene was quite memorable. (But not quite as sensual as when the audience first sees De Mornay's character in my opinion). But, I cannot imagine being on a train, in those seats, for the very first time, as being all that wonderful. Yes, there is an aspect of exhibitionism to it, but still, it seems to be an odd locale for a couple to lose their virginity. But this is a very minor quibble.

I do wonder about Hermione’s parents, though. I imagine that this story starts shortly after the end of the school year. Yet, Hermione leaves a note that her parents won’t see for a couple of days? Didn’t they want the ski trip because they don’t get to spend much time together? I’m just curious if there was going to be some sort of back-story for this throwaway line.

Anyway, I realize that this story may never see completion, but I just wanted to say that I found the set-up to be quite interesting.

Chris

Bernd Jacobitz posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 11:49pm

And in comes Fleur!
a chapter in the very best Kinsfire quality.
I know ever again why I figure you as one of the best.

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 11:43pm

I was thinking that Hermione was going to sledgehammer DUMBledore when I first read this; however, it looks like the Dumble-sledging is on hold for now. Still, a good lead up (but you surprised me with what it led up TO.....).

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 11:38pm

Hermione used the Ole Clue-By-Four on Harry until he Actually Got That Clue. England to France? Try England to *Belgium*. I just hope that Harry doesn't need to hit Ron with a Banishing Hex for *him* to get a clue. I had been thinking that Ron might have had a *small* chance; however, according to Hermione, Ron had No Chance At All. And why would I be hearing either Fleur or Gabrielle in Brussels?

Gustav posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 10:14pm

LIKED it. Very promising beginning and just the type of fic that I've wanted to read for a while.

I hope that you will finde you muse and continiue writing ..

Rrds

/Gustav

Adam posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 10:02pm

Good start to this, be interesting to see where you take it. Now all they have to do is get past the person who has recognized them :)

jake m posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 9:54pm

hey kinsfire.
i found your site www.kinsfire.net while searching the net it took me at least 2 weeks to read the stories you have posted there.
very entertaining thanks alot!
then i stumled on the link to all these fan fic authors and holy heck theres more to read!
ive nearly finsihed reading all the stories or the ones im interested in.
i always like it when hermoine gets harry and ron goes ans gets stuffed lol
so i think thi sone could be awsome plz write with speed!

Patches posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 9:31pm

I like this story. Just enough information to keep the imagination working. But not too much.
I'm looking forward to where this goes. Thank you for writing.
pms

Patches posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 8:58pm

Oh, oh! Harry is fed up with Dumbledore some more. I want to see where you take this. It has a good start so far. I'll bet Hermione wants to kick Harry's ass for not telling him how he feels sooner. Thank you for writing.
pms

Alexis posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 6:47pm

a wonderful job!!! I am really enjoying this story and I do hope you pick it back up again!

Bobmin356 posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 6:47pm

Is this a new story or one you're posting from someplace else?

Voldemort is Dead posted a comment on Friday 17th March 2006 5:46pm

Keep with the heterosexual stories. I am not a fan of slash or homosexual and lesbian stories.

I have watched all of the Harry Potter movies, and I really do not like Ron. I don't think Harry should be involved with Ginevra or Hermione. Nor should Hermione be involved with Ron.

Ron is a loser. Harry and Hermione should put him in his place as a jealous and hateful git. Ginevra, Ron's sister, should get over her crush with Harry.