MaryJane6707 posted a comment on Monday 20th November 2006 3:38pm for The End of the Beginning

I am still trilled myself that Harry was able to help oust all the baddies and start over. I also like all of the new girls. I'd say they are all going to be busy!

Dr.Shadow posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 7:34pm for The End of the Beginning

Pretty anti-climatic so far

Dr.Shadow posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 7:34pm for The End of the Beginning

Pretty anti-climatic

naosei posted a comment on Saturday 18th November 2006 5:54am for The End of the Beginning

Even as a first draft a nice story. :D

Tumshie posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 6:53am for The End of the Beginning

Excellent writing once again, I love the way your mind works and appreciate the time and effort you put into your work. Thank you once again.

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 5:10am for The End of the Beginning

Well... it doesn't always end with a bang. Besides, Harry is nice enough a guy that he would want to avoid a category-A bloodbath in the style of 'Lord of the Rings'.

Besides, as Sun-Tsu wisely pointed out, the best victory comes at the least price in blood. He was able to manoeuvre Scrimgeour to basically take himself out without too much of a fight, which was nearly an ideal outcome. Still, I await the expanded version of the rebellion with bated breath.

Harry got his own punishment: He is the MofM! So much for an 'easy' life. ;-)

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

Alorkin posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 4:05am for The End of the Beginning

I want desert! The story was flowing smoothly, but then you allasudden finished it.
It was a really great tale, but there seems to be something missing.
Harry's defending the family against Scrimgeour's troops has made him a hero.(again!)
Minister Scrimboy appears to be following Fudgie's footsteps, ruling the wizarding world as some kind of personal feifdom.
If my parent's graves, or my wife's had been desectrated in such a manner, I believe I would have reacted in exactly the same manner.
The ministry mouthpiece is as always, doing just exactly what it is told, and the bug, desperately needs to be squashed!
Snape's arrest is nothing more than petty revenge. The Quibbler has probably seen a massive increase in subscriptions.
The arson attack on the Quibbler is also revenge, (though so is the firing of the mouthpiece).
Final scene was well writ, from the moment they were captured, to the pronouncement of the queen.
All in all, an excellent short. Alorkin

The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 10:19pm for The End of the Beginning

I will willingly wait for the rewrite to read a sequel. A wonderful story and I enjoyed it immensely. Keep up the great work. I'm looking forward to anything you post.

Manatheron posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 5:52pm for The End of the Beginning

I won't lie, the end is a little weak, You might want to expand on harry's capibilities, and perhaps throw in a battle with rufus and Harry just to get ol scumgroper to confess, cause everyone knows the bad guy's have to gloat about their schemes. :)

'IN a fight give me a bad man over a good man anyday. A bad man will gloat, he will try to prolong your agony before finly finishing you, a good man will kill you with hardly a word'

~Author Unknown~

Renzo7 posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 3:39pm for The End of the Beginning

Excellent work, sad to see it ends, but I can't wait to see your next masterpiece. keep it up!

Davideg posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 12:40pm for The End of the Beginning

thank you for this fantastic sequal to Like A Phoenix From The Ashes it realy was a fantastic read thank you

jdcox61 posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 12:34pm for The End of the Beginning

Aww man, I like this story, but I was kinda hoping kingsley would shoot scrimegour in the ass. Kinsley always kinda looks like Samuel Jackson in my mind whenever I visualize him. I just wanted to think about rufus yelling "You bastard, you shot me in the ass!" Mmmmm........Good Times. Great Story, I liked it alot

Deborahsu posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 10:02am for The End of the Beginning

That's it? It's over already? This is an outline and a beginning, right? Good job!

matthiasblack posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 8:09am for The End of the Beginning

Excellent, I am happy that you wrote this follow up and look forward to your writing in the future.

imakeeper posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 8:02am for The End of the Beginning

wow... thats insane... i love how the lovegoods are depicted as being very sane! i cant want for more drama and harry better succeed

Adam posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 7:40am for The End of the Beginning

interesting end to this :) Good story

Teresa Lynne posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 7:06am for The End of the Beginning

Yay!!!!!!!! So, are Scrimgeour and Skeeter going to have adjoining cells in Azkaban? Or is she going to scream " freedom of the press " for all of her slander? I wonder if the Queen and the PM planned to have Harry take over from their first meeting, and had already drafted a pardon for him. I'd love to know what Patricia Braddock thought about her actions. Or has she used an extensive set of disguise charms, fled the country and moved to Ecuador? Hmmmmm, hanging, drawing, and quartering....Scrimgeour's pretty full of himself, isn't he? King Rufus the First indeed!As for what they did to those graves.....at least those creeps are out of the gene pool! They'd be right at home in any bigoted group. Thanks for writing such an intersting story!

Ken Warner posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 6:51am for The End of the Beginning

great story thru out and a good start for a new series
thanks

Al posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 6:03am for The End of the Beginning

Great story enjoyed the ride with all of them again.

BJH posted a comment on Thursday 16th November 2006 5:37am for The End of the Beginning

And just to be complete, let us examine Ginny's motives here. She spends a year hating Harry because she loves him. She admits her mistake and accepts that she has lost him. Or does she?

Five years later, at the first opportunity we see that Harry is seperated, physically, emotionally, and telepathically, from his wives, Ginny takes advantage of the opportunity to participate in an orgy where she winds up between the legs, and munching the carpet, of the one of Harry's wives that she has the most positive history with and whom would be the most receptive of her overtures.

If I were a cynic - and I am - I would be commending her on the patient and very slytherin approach she is taking to getting Harry back.

BJH

Kinsfire replied:

It's one of the reasons that I want to put this through a rewrite after the month is over - there are a lot of parts of the story that need expanding, to be honest, but the idea was given to me and I wanted to run with it.

This story is really a first draft, if you will. In a rewrite, I'll end up expanding things ... what I did in this is largely what I complain that JKR did with her books. There is a very large back story as to why Ginny is Harry's perfect girl, but we've never really seen that story.

I want to bring Ginny's part forward earlier in the fic, and show that she's grown. Show scenes like Harry looking at her as she climbs from the ocean and admiring the view; show that she's truly grown and can live with being his friend. Because THAT'S where the relationship will truly come from, if it does. (You'll note that I left the Gabbi/Isabella/Ginny question unanswered?)

I fully expect that the rewrite will likely end up at least half again as large.

And now everyone has an idea of WHY I use betas for my other stories... *grin*