Drifter950 posted a comment on Friday 11th January 2008 9:58am for The End of the Beginning

Like the first in the series "Like A Phoenix From The Ashes", this is a well written and fun story.

I look forward to the nest in the series.



May the MUSE be with you!!!

mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 1st January 2008 8:54pm for The End of the Beginning

You'll be revising? Oh, how exciting, I do love this but there are so many possibilites!! I do think the ending was quite abrupt. I couldn't have imagined the story being anywhere near its end until the last quarter of this chapter. But I enjoyed it overall, I do so love that marriage. And I forgot to mention this earlier but I actually think the Ginny thing is quite appropriate. She's matured and repented and the like. Although I didn't expect it I don't think it's a completely ludicrous idea.

BloodRedJawz posted a comment on Friday 7th September 2007 1:26pm for The End of the Beginning

Awwww, and I was looking forward to Honeyspear and Ginny joining the harem XD

Jdnokc posted a comment on Friday 17th August 2007 1:10am for The End of the Beginning

liked both stories but a couple things i noticed in this sequal. 1 in an earlier chapter you had already said that both Hermoine and Pansys parents had already been moved from their homes but then a couple chapters later said they needed to moved???? also earlier in the story you said that "the entire manor groundswas to be placed under the fidelius so the aurors would not have been able to find it attack it. just curious about that.

Neil Glover posted a comment on Tuesday 12th June 2007 9:12pm for The End of the Beginning

Great story, i hope you'll do a sequel

Infin1x posted a comment on Tuesday 15th May 2007 11:15am for The End of the Beginning

It is a weak ending and I would be excited to see either this expanded or a small sequel but it still turned out well.

Cynthia1850 posted a comment on Saturday 5th May 2007 5:21am for The End of the Beginning

Yeah for the good guys!!! Excellent story by the way.

gadriam posted a comment on Monday 30th April 2007 7:55pm for The End of the Beginning

Hmm. Yes, it's a good synopsis but it could do with a rewrite, to give the people more...reality. This story felt a lot like a sketch in primary colours instead of a completed fic.
The newspaper articles were good, but not great. You make it quite clear that the Revolutionaries have the masses' support, but nothing is done with it. The crowds of the poor never really gets the faces you seem to go for, and the pureblood league does an incredible amount of nothing. There were also a bunch of subplots, like Ginny and Gabrielle, that didn't really go anywhere.
I still enjoyed it, though. I really like your lighter style (coming straight from Bobmin's Sunrise), and the smutty bits are powered by love rather than hormones. No offense, but you're like Eddings to Bobmin's Donaldson. Your writing is simple, leaving much to my imagination and i like that. It makes things vivid, and i can view the story as dark as i want it because you leave it to me to choose what to focus on, Angst or Boobs, and while i haven't seen you do the Eddings, by making the basics up as you go along, you do leave enough threads hanging to fill a book on it's own.

DISCLAIMER! This review was written by a guy who couldn't write a story to save his life!

Looking forward to Magic: Revolutions Mk2

g

patrik svensson posted a comment on Sunday 15th April 2007 5:56am for The End of the Beginning

My thought about the fic as a whole.

Great story,
keep up the good work.

darthme1011 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 8:58pm for The End of the Beginning

is there another Firebird Suite? part 3

writerpayne posted a comment on Friday 9th March 2007 11:36am for The End of the Beginning

i really hope that you do update this story or add a sequal because i loved it. Thanks for Writting a brilliant story.

Laura aka Lady_payne

vertru posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 9:14am for The End of the Beginning

I thought the ending was eminently logical, thought it could probably use a bit of fleshing out. A couple of more chapters, maybe, showing how they change things and how the "Purebloods" fight the changes would be interesting. And that is not to mention that dangling rope you left concerning certain young women who'd like to be wives #5 and #6. Good job, my friend, especially considering you wrote this in just over two weeks. Moving on now to project #2 now.

Vern

mekareami posted a comment on Wednesday 3rd January 2007 12:31pm for The End of the Beginning

I really enjoyed this story but felt the ending was rather abrupt. I hope you someday continue this story :) Thank you for writing.

Ian Major posted a comment on Monday 1st January 2007 10:10am for The End of the Beginning

Dang that was a cool story, thank you for writing it.

kainboa posted a comment on Monday 25th December 2006 7:56am for The End of the Beginning

great story, i would really love to see a third story in this series that shows how harry deals with leading the goverment

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Tuesday 19th December 2006 4:25pm for The End of the Beginning

But! But...
Please, pretty please don't leave us hanging like this.
It is such a brilliant story (yes I am using flattery, I am desperate)
PLease write just a teeny, tiny epilogue or something.
Thank you, thank you, thank you

TheHard posted a comment on Saturday 16th December 2006 2:09pm for The End of the Beginning

Nice story... great strongs points in the story, and you're right, we all know that you can do better in rewritting the end of the story :)

Thanks for sharing

snidget41 posted a comment on Friday 15th December 2006 10:22am for The End of the Beginning

I liked it!! Not too super-harryish (is that a word?) I agree about the ending -- I couldn't figure out how the PM came onto the scene, and would have liked to see a more lengthy transition to the final ending.

Keep up the good work!
Snidget41/Bob

Jeffrey1 posted a comment on Friday 8th December 2006 2:56pm for The End of the Beginning

you are correct.decent sequel,weak ending.i liked it as a whole,but it was lacking something.heart?soul?purpose?maybe/maybe not.
as a whole,i do like your stories.which of course means i'm trying hard to be respectful (and PATIENT ).
good luck and god bless,

Jeffrey

Minerva Granger posted a comment on Wednesday 29th November 2006 12:45pm for The End of the Beginning

Congratulations, Keith. I really, really enjoyed this. I just wish it had gone on longer, althought i am glad it will be picked up and worked on again later. Good luck with NaNoWriMo. I know I failed it, but maybe next year. Anyhow, i'm looking forward to seeing what happens next, when you get the chance to pick up this story again.