By Kinsfire
Reviews
Krsi posted a comment on Sunday 22nd March 2009 5:58pm
Okay, if Harry's is the only polygamous marriage, what about Madam Bones's? You said in the previous story that she is in a relationship with two others (I forgot the names at the moment) and it was legal (she looked it up specifically so she could be in the relationship).
Other than that, great stories and chapter.
NemoHac posted a comment on Tuesday 6th January 2009 9:52pm
An interesting story but I think I could see some of what you're talking about with the draft status. Most of the tension was gone once Lorelei was returned.
If you're still considering the re-write I have a few thoughts regarding Hermione/Franklin:
Both in Ashes and the shortly after Lorelei was returned there was reference to Harry being off limits to other women. Indeed this only seemed to cease being an issue when it provided something to use against the ministry. Based on this I would have to say that up until half way through this sequel it was an equal five way marriage so any swinging etc seems to be extremely out of character for the leads as portrayed by you.
Katana01 posted a comment on Thursday 4th December 2008 5:23am
I'm hopeing that when you rewright this story you make it longer and makeing it more like a real revolution and fuck the british goverment they need help themselfs they need to be brought to see that the way they have is wrong
Lunzatis posted a comment on Thursday 6th November 2008 4:10pm
I enjoyed your entire story and hope that you will come back and follow up on the plot holes that you left. However I can not completely agree with your portrayal of Benjamin Franklin at the end of chapter 5 when he comments on Iraq. Instead of ranting and raving like most people do, I will give you my point of view on the matter and would enjoy hearing what you think of my point of view in an actual discussion. So here goes.
I can not in good conscience say that the war in Iraq was wrong. Many of the things that was done to Harry by the Ministry of Magic in your story was done to the people of Iraq and in many cases much worse. The US may not have declared war for the right reasons but we stayed for the right reasons. To ensure the people of Iraq would have a chance to choose their leaders and whatever kind of governement that they wanted. I would like to think that Benjamin Franklin would agree that we stayed for the right reasons. Many of those reasons are the same reasons that the United States broke from England. I have grown tired of people blaming President Bush for the war in Iraq. Either people have forgotten or were never taught about how the government of the United States works. The President of the United States can not declare war without a declaration of war being passed by both the house and the senate before hand. If the President could, the United States would have been in a lot more wars then what we've been in. The fact is that war was declared by the United States. The house and senate both passed the declaration of war and the President signed the declaration. The house and senate had the same information that the President had. Unfortunately, we may never see that information. I hope that you will read this review and consider what I've said. Thanks.
Carolyn Jinn posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 11:30pm
I believe you have done a good job with this story.
While I do agree with you that the ending is a little weak, It could be a leader into another story about Harry rebuilding the ministry and the wizarding world.
The descriptions in this story are very good but seems to loose momentum in this last chapter.
Overall, I think it is a good story.
Brad1 posted a comment on Friday 30th May 2008 6:48pm
loved the new story cant wait to start reading the next part!
dennisud posted a comment on Friday 30th May 2008 12:03am
Well this sure answers my earlier question...BUT;
Will there be more on this storyline?
Plus now he has 4 wives and ...what 2 girlfriends?!?!?!?
dennisud
Secca posted a comment on Friday 9th May 2008 1:40pm
I enjoyed it. If you are still planing on a re-write, I would encourage you in such an action, not because it needs it, but because these things tend to get better the more effort we put into them. And if I enjoyed it this go 'round, how much more so will I enjoy the new and improved version?
The Resident posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd April 2008 6:05pm
As always, an excellent story. Whether or not you write a third part (the reconstruction of the British Magical Government) or not, I have thoroughly enjoyed this wild ride. I know you will anyway, but I encourage you to keep up the great work.
Anomie posted a comment on Monday 7th April 2008 12:12pm
Very nice story, but I feel that the ending left to many things unanswered. The thing that stuck out most in my mind was that Isabella Honeyspear, Ginney Weasly and Gabrielle Delacour want to intergrate themselves and join as Harry's wives and it was left hanging. Another was the starting of mending of fences between Harry and the Weasly parents, but nothing was developed on that. And a third plot was that Percy dissappeared while warning everyone on the Island of the attack on Potter Manor and it was mentioned that he might have been captured by Ministry personal, but we weren't shown what happened after that, such as was he actually sent to Azkaban like harry surmised or was he tortured like Harry was or might he have been yanked by Amelia's loyal auror's before Ministry personal were able to get to him.
I can't tell if these are just unanswered plot threads or hints to what might be covered in a sequel. If a sequal is on the way, I'm looking forward to it.
noylj posted a comment on Thursday 27th March 2008 6:24pm
Please, needs a better ending. I'm not sure you had to Franklin a living wizard--I notice that in fanfic, that almost every famous person was/is a witch or wizard, thus validating the pureblood attitude.
Of course, my opinion of the WW is that of another fanfic I read where Harry and his extended family go off to live out of time/space to reappear in 1000 or 10000 years after the WW has died out completely. Never did read the end of the story, but just thinking of the WW dying out seemed good to me. Since Harry took all the "good" witches and wizards, the pure-bloods were left to their own devices.
noylj posted a comment on Thursday 27th March 2008 1:08pm
I hope that Harry will "clean up" the WW this time.
Drifter950 posted a comment on Friday 11th January 2008 9:58am
Like the first in the series "Like A Phoenix From The Ashes", this is a well written and fun story.
I look forward to the nest in the series.
May the MUSE be with you!!!
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 1st January 2008 8:54pm
You'll be revising? Oh, how exciting, I do love this but there are so many possibilites!! I do think the ending was quite abrupt. I couldn't have imagined the story being anywhere near its end until the last quarter of this chapter. But I enjoyed it overall, I do so love that marriage. And I forgot to mention this earlier but I actually think the Ginny thing is quite appropriate. She's matured and repented and the like. Although I didn't expect it I don't think it's a completely ludicrous idea.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Tuesday 1st January 2008 9:35am
So great. I just love what you've done with this.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Sunday 30th December 2007 9:48pm
That's screwed up. Hey, you keep changing the spelling of Ragnok(c)'s name. Just so you know. This is good, I must read on.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Saturday 29th December 2007 8:06pm
That's cool.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 7:05pm
I did. And correctly. I love this.
mashimaromadness posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 10:56am
Yes, that last line made it very clear Lorelei never lost a finger. Convincing Harry it was real had to take some skilled magic though...
sleepygirl68 posted a comment on Wednesday 27th May 2009 11:19pm